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Just a suggestion--skip the FBI, write about dairy farming. Or agriculture at least. There are a thousand pulpy, men's adventure-type books out there, and every CW class has That Guy that writes that stuff, some of them EVERY SINGLE TIME. It's cancer-inducing, it sucks. I have sat through a bunch of classes with That Guy.

Meanwhile, there's a thing you actually did, that most people haven't done. Don't write about the farming itself, make it the backdrop, the setting. Take what's ordinary and inject something extraordinary into it.

Example: Guy is a farmer. One day he's plowing his fields or whatever and his tractor gets stuck. He gets out, he's digging around, finds a suitcase with a million dollars in it.

Maybe he puts it back, digs it up every year and looks at it, but doesn't touch it for 20 years. Then he finally breaks, and that night, there's a knock on his door. Could go true crime with it, could go Stephen King-supernatural. Point is, you're taking a thing and a place you know, and then writing the story you want. There's 5k words there, easy, along with all the elements a story needs.
 
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The first thing to understand about the FBI is that the bureau operates under a relatively narrow statutory authority. The FBI is not the "national police" and has no lawful authority to act unless the alleged crime falls within its authority.

The second thing to understand about the FBI is that they are not everywhere, every day, subject to respond to every complaint. Unless you are in a major metropolitan area the chances of an agent responding within a day or two is relatively small. Usually the local authorities will respond to offenses, and if the circumstances seem to indicate FBI interest, a request or referral will be made. Even then, the majority of the response will probably be provided by local police or sheriffs departments, and the FBI involvement will follow along after some amount of delay.

Another thing to understand about the FBI is that they expect (shall I say demand?) absolute cooperation from all other agencies, while almost never sharing any information in return. The bureau is respected and deferred to in many cases, but the bureau has never been known to concern themselves with any reciprocal efforts. Relationships are not always cordial or friendly.

If this sounds like sour grapes that is not my intention. I am only attempting to correct some general misconceptions about the FBI and its relationships with the public, and with local and state authorities. During my 24 years in law enforcement I have enjoyed good relationships with several good FBI agents, but I have also been completely stonewalled at times after I have worked my butt off building a case, perhaps even apprehending a perpetrator or two, then been shut off completely from any further involvement.

If you plan on writing a story about the FBI I would suggest that you keep in mind that public perceptions (based upon movies and TV shows) bear little resemblance to reality, and local authorities are frequently left in the dark when a bureau agent steps into a case. The reality seems to provide plenty of room for fictional development.

Now I'll just make sure that the hammer on my Glock isn't cocked and the safety is locked in place while others chime in.
 
You don't have to write about what you know, but do need to write about what you can learn.
Interesting point of view, to which you are certainly entitled. Myself, I am not all that interested in what Joe **** the ragman writes about something he learned last week. If he doesn't know about it, why is he writing about it?
 
My original topic was to be related to agriculture and country life.... but the professor thinks that's too close to what I know so I was informed I'll be doing a crime story set in a city. Hence the need for information. :)
IMO, your professor is completely wrong, but I'm not sure exactly what he is trying to achieve, so I'll allow as to he is probably completely wrong, or really wrong, but only 80% wrong.
 
Someday someone will write a major book about crime in small towns in America like. Monowi, Nebraska.

They did. It's called Fargo, but it's delivered in the form of a movie and three excellent seasons of TV.

Could read In Cold Blood, though.

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My original topic was to be related to agriculture and country life.... but the professor thinks that's too close to what I know so I was informed I'll be doing a crime story set in a city. Hence the need for information.

Oh, sorry, I completely glossed over that part. And yes--that's just...awful. Tragic. Getting assigned a subject for a creative writing class. I've heard of such horrors before. It's almost like the adjuncts that get stuck teaching these courses, having been denied their dream of publishing a book, make it their life's work to ensure that nobody else ever writes for pleasure.

Maybe go with a private investigator? If you read much, grab a Dennis Lehane--Prayers For Rain, or A Drink Before the War. The only flaw I can find with Lehane is that Kenzie isn't the main character--Bubba Rogowski is. Not that there's a problem with that.
 
I don't care what they actually drive, but for the love of God, please have him\her in something other than a "Crown Vic"
Is a blacked out Hellcat out of the question?
 
Interesting point of view, to which you are certainly entitled. Myself, I am not all that interested in what Joe **** the ragman writes about something he learned last week. If he doesn't know about it, why is he writing about it?

Well, he's probably writing about it to make his mortgage payment and buy groceries!

And to feel creative and fulfilled as a writer. We're artists of a sort, like sculptors and painters. Writers are seldom "ragmen". I think you're being a little harsh there...

The public likes stories/movies about dramatic things, usually where lives are at risk. But almost no one who really lives those adventures writes!

But when an intelligent author and researcher like David Lindsay rides repeatedly with homicide detectives, gets to know them, hears their stories and sees how they interact, tell morbid jokes, and investigate cases, he comes to know the field well enough to write very credible books about such activities.

Do you think those who write romances really date or marry the men in their stories? :D Have adventures like their heroines do?

Robert C. Ruark wasn't a white hunter or Kenya farmer, but he got to know such men and interviewed police and authorities on Kenyan native tribes and their beliefs and activities to where he produced magnificent, quite accurate books. He did go on safari, learned how hunting was done there, and took his share of game, while studying what he saw along the way.

BTW, Jeff, don't just write this as a class paper. Post it on FanFiction.net or on their sister site for fiction not connected to books, TV shows, or movies.

If you write it as a case handled by the Criminal Minds FBI profilers, you can avoid the liberal agenda sometimes shown by the show's writers and make the case and the procedures more realistic. Your criminal(s) can be more realistic. I know a nurse who writes, Star Wars dramas using just characters from that fandom, but written as if they were also (mainly) characters in the film, Pretty Woman. She writes some hot stuff, well researched and believable. I like her mentions of cars, watches, luxury hotels and the rooms, etc. that make her stories come alive.

Her characters are named after Star Wars characters Rey and Ren, but otherwise have little connection to those movies. But it fits the genre enough to be accepted, and her tales are hot and interesting.

She's vacationing in London this week, and I bet she learns enough there to use British locations and cultural matters in her future fics. Among other places she'll be is Fortnum & Mason, the upscale dept. store. Her female characters want to marry billionaires, so that store becomes a likely setting in stories. She'll be able to describe it and unique things sold there.

British readers of my own stories suggested that I have Marguerite Krux Roxton in my, The Lost World stories shop there. It suits her nature perfectly. Harrod's is another likely store for both my and her characters, once mine left the mysterious Plateau of the TV series. My son has shopped in Harrod's and sent me some of their tea, store brand. Don't bother seeking it out. I found tea from both Twining's and Taylor's of Harrogate to be much better. But there's no doubt that Harrod's is justly among the most famous stores in the world, and the food sections at both stores are surely a delight to shoppers.

I can read Online about those shops and ask questions about them of my son and of my nurse friend and set scenes in them in my stories that seem very authentic, if I don't delve too much into detail, which isn't needed. In most cases, I could just have characters Marguerite Krux, by then Lady Roxton, Countess of Avebury and her friend Finn, by then Mrs. George Challenger (eventually Baroness Challenger), meet at the stores to shop or have tea there. If I want more intimate detail in a shop, they can be in their custom dressmaker's, Marie-Claire Dumont, a character and store that I created, so can describe well. I don't have to have shopped in or worked at Fortnum's, etc. to use the store in fiction.
 
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I do suggest that an author using the FBI in stories first research the Bureau in books and in books by former agents who describe their work and how it's done. Good examples are books like John Douglas's, "Mind Hunter" and, "The Evil That Men Do", about Roy Hazelwood's career.

You'll be much better informed and able to create plausible stories.

I have also worked a few times with actual special agents on criminal cases and that is good background info. I know exactly how one young special agent felt and behaved when he was sent on his own to arrest a dangerous criminal wanted for, among other things, car theft. The FBI was after him on an Interstate Flight warrant. The agent showed me his gun and holster and spare ammo and talked guns briefly, including options.
 
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Someday someone will write a major book about crime in small towns in America like. Monowi, Nebraska.


ROFLMAO!!! Like one where the Mayor is in a conspiracy with the city Historian to murder the local Librarian?????
 
The "Lucas Davenport" solution.

Hey, Lucas is rich and drives some cool cars. He's now a US Marshal, not a MN state cop.

BTW, those wanting small town cops should check Steven Havill's books about a small town in southern New Mexico. Pretty good.

The sheriff in his early books reminds me of a member of this board. He retired, became a cattle brand inspector, and a Hispanic sheriff and Undersheriff replaced him.
 
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Interesting point of view, to which you are certainly entitled. Myself, I am not all that interested in what Joe **** the ragman writes about something he learned last week. If he doesn't know about it, why is he writing about it?

Well, I can certainly see your point with regard to nonfiction- but when it comes to storytelling the key is to create something from nothing, and one cannot possibly be an expert in all areas about which one is writing.... a good story has many characters, many situations, and all have to have some degree of backstory.
 
IMO, your professor is completely wrong, but I'm not sure exactly what he is trying to achieve, so I'll allow as to he is probably completely wrong, or really wrong, but only 80% wrong.

I happen to think he's an idiot.... but I have to play the cards I'm dealt. The more accurate I can be the better- hence my questions - but I do feel a bit silly. I detest reading nonsense about my profession (such as what PETA puts out) so my thought here is to learn what I can so as to not make the same mistake when writing about something I know nothing about- law enforcement.
 
Just a suggestion--skip the FBI, write about dairy farming. Or agriculture at least. There are a thousand pulpy, men's adventure-type books out there, and every CW class has That Guy that writes that stuff, some of them EVERY SINGLE TIME. It's cancer-inducing, it sucks. I have sat through a bunch of classes with That Guy.

YES! I agree, and I've written quite a bit about my time farming- lots of good stories in it. (Quite a bit of entertainment in the time I spent driving a milk truck in the winter in rural New England too... but I digress) and those stories are what I really enjoy writing. If I ever get anything published, it will probably be some of those stories- not any fiction I mess about with.

My affinity for firearms is well known around school, and it makes me rather unpopular. (After all, EVERYONE who likes guns, and even worse CARRIES ONE AROUND LOADED, is a psychopath...) so I suspect this assignment is, to some degree, punative from a very liberal professor.

It drives him nuts that I have admitted (his word) to carrying a loaded pistol everywhere it's legal for me to do so... and have never fired it except on a range, never been in any trouble, and have the arrogance to be a straight A student. Oh, and having had a financially successful career prior to going to college isn't very popular either. After all, how can I be an excellent student who's also a "gun nut" and a "blue collar" worker? :)
 
Just wanna thank the OP for bothering to ask and try to get somewhat informed.
A few years ago I was reading several books written by a renown NC author, Nicholas Sparks. He lives in the Eastern part of NC, same as me, and most of his stories are set here.
Read a book set in Craven Co., NC (New Bern is county seat) and one of the main characters was a Deputy with that Sheriff's Office.
OMG - it was awful.
Said Deputy made his own hours, went anywhere and well outside the county while working. Never handled calls but 'settled disputes' on his own, 'swiping off the safety on his Magnum service revolver'. He went from being a Patrol Deputy to a Detective and back and forth all on his own, the list went on.

Being bored, I emailed the author through a provided link in the book, nicely pointing out all the errors in his concept of what a Deputy does and offering to help if he would like.
Got no reply. Oh well.

I know I about go nuts when reading the nonsense many people write about farmers..... (yes, some of us do know how to use computers, no I don't own any bib overalls, etc) so I try to be careful not to make silly statements about other professions. :)
 
I retired from the Bureau in 2016 after 25 years. You don't say what time frame so I'll just answer for 2016:

1 - Every Agent has a handgun of course. Glocks rule the roost, though there are a few Sigs still grandfathered in. No revolvers. Long guns are issued by each office and is generally up to personal preference. I always drew an MP5/10, but those are gone now. The other choices are 14" 870s and semi-auto M4s. Everyone gets a takehome car. You can get a laptop if you want, I never did. SWAT guys now get Glock 17s in FDE. 1911s are all gone. HRT has a variety of guns to choose from.

2 - Handgun, 2 mags, probably cuffs, cellphone, badge usually on belt in front of gun, creds in a wallet.

3 - Office. There are 56 field offices and hundreds of Resident Agencies (RAs). I was in a one-man RA for five years, but I still had an office.

4 - I'll pass on answering that.

5 - HRT is a full time assignment, based at Quantico. Each field office has a SWAT team, those guys do it as an additional duty and also work cases.

6 - Almost everything in the movies and TV is wrong. It would be easier to PM me with questions about specific things.

Thank you- this is all very helpful. It's good of you to take the time!
Jeff
 
I don't care what they actually drive, but for the love of God, please have him\her in something other than a "Crown Vic"
Is a blacked out Hellcat out of the question?

Hey, the Crown Vic was a great car, I miss them. I like them so much I own two of them at the moment. Although I'm a Ford guy I'll also admit that I miss the old Caprice Classic with the 350.

Most of the Vic's have already left service, it's been a while since they stopped making them. Our local FBI all had the Taurus and the Charger last I heard. Most of our local departments have gone to the Explorer or the Charger.
 
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